Sunday Small Stone

that golden sun
rounds green edge
of Buckfast bottle

and shines through
where tonic wine
should slosh in

concrete gutter
without grass

I love writing small stones.

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10 comments for “Sunday Small Stone

  1. May 8, 2012 at 8:53 pm

    nice textures in that last line…hard textures….perhaps playing off the empty bottle as well….nice..
    brian miller recently posted..OpenLinkNight: like trying to fight the rain

    • ekswitaj
      May 8, 2012 at 8:56 pm

      Thanks Brian. I was mostly thinking about the contrast between the shiny green glass (and the EVIL liquid it once contained) and the dirty ground it was on.

  2. May 8, 2012 at 11:32 pm

    I like the play of colours and textures in this. The bright-sun beginning, and the light play in the green glass, I’m thinking:lovely! Then–the grassless concrete at the end works with the mention of the bottle to tell me what was really going on.
    chris recently posted..Breathless

    • ekswitaj
      May 9, 2012 at 12:02 am

      Thank you, Chris. It was a beautiful day out, though I’m fairly certain whoever emptied the bottle didn’t think so!

  3. May 9, 2012 at 1:06 am

    A touch of light, against the gutter darkness…just watch out, even the shards of that can prove quite sharp.

    • ekswitaj
      May 9, 2012 at 7:08 pm

      Definitely–though the shards probably aren’t as dangerous as what was once inside the bottle. ;)

  4. May 9, 2012 at 3:50 pm

    Elizabeth i love
    Chris Lawrence recently posted..Our Days To Live

    • ekswitaj
      May 9, 2012 at 7:08 pm

      Thank you!

  5. May 10, 2012 at 2:30 am

    I think that your ability to let the thing be what it is a very tough thing to do. We often want to see something in things, have them speak to us of other meanings and significance. I think there’s a need often to just acknowledge that things are things and usurp or undermine that search for meaning.

    • ekswitaj
      May 11, 2012 at 12:37 am

      Thank you. It’s definitely something I have to be conscious (and conscientious) about. Reading Imagists helps.

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